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do you think internet connet people or isolate them?

There has been much discussion in the present age regarding the issue of whether the
internet
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 has positive or negative effects on human life. There are those who argue that the
internet
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 is a new means of
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 and strengthens relationships between
people
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.
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 the same
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, others think it prevents
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 from having more interpersonal contacts. The primary position is the most reasonable view
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 my way of thinking.
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 advocates argue that it provides new opportunities for
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 between individuals as it enhances connectivity.
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 technology makes it possible for you to stay connected with others, regardless of where you are. By utilizing
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 trend, you can send your family an email on new year's eve while they are living in a different place to wish them a happy new year. To put it in another way, keeping in touch with loved ones the whole
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 is made possible by the
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.
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, critics of the
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 believe that
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 use, while connecting more
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 virtually, makes
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 more isolated socially because the more
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 they spend online, the less
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 they spend interacting in real life. They believe that electronic
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 is not as in-depth or reliable as
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 in person or on the phone. Critics
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 see a possibility of the
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 breaking
people
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 apart into minority groups,
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 of less dependence on mainstream media, a phenomenon known as "balkanization."
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, many
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 believe that
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 today,
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, especially young
people
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, prefer to use their mobile phones and surf the web
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 of managing to get together with their friends and enjoy a few fun hours. Teenagers,
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, are likely to have an Instagram account with many followers but only one or two close friends in real life. More specifically, the current generation is not aware of the importance of making new strong friendships, which can lead to feeling lonely during
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uncertain times.
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, I would conclude that, while the
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 is beneficial on many levels, there are
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 some drawbacks.
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, like other trends,
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 one must
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 be controlled and utilized in constructive ways. Clearly, it makes our lives easier and we are able to stay in touch with family and friends via email, video calls, and so on.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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