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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these wiews and give your own opinion.

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It is often argued that should
children
 learn about how to be perfect
members
 of
society
 from their
parents
 or
school
? Even if
school
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the school
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 has a lot of benefits for
children
, I completely agree with
children
 should learn to be good
members
 of
society
 by their
parents
.
First
off
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 all, I would like to tell about why
parents
 have
important
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an important
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 role
for
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teach
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teaching
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children
 to be
fine
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a fine
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person
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people
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 of
society
? When
the
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people were
child
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children
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, they try to learn everything about life.
Children
 want to be a big
person
such
 as their father, mother even if their big brother or sister so that parent’s role
very
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 critical for them.
For example
, if
parents
 do not teach
children
 about how they should to behaviour their adults,
children
 may not be
a
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kind or respectful
person
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people
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. Overall,
parents
 should teach their
children
 about everything which is important for them.
On the other hand
, some people believe that
children
 must
be learn
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 to how
be
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to be
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 good
members
 of
society
 from
school
. They have some reasons for why they support
this
idea
.
Firstly
, They think that while
children
 do not look at their
parents
 as
a
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instructive but they look at their teachers as
a
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apply
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instructive.
For instance
, when teachers give
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an idea
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idea
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ideas
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 about any topic,
children
 believe that
this
idea
 is correct and they behave as their teacher’s
idea
.
Secondly
,
parents
 often act
their
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on their
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children
 emotionally.
Although
some
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in some
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 situations
parents
 should be a logical
person
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people
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 against their
children
, they do not act like that. In conclusion, People who agree about
children
 should learn from
school
 have a lot of correct reasons
however
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,however
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, I strongly agree that
parents
 should teach their
children
 about how to be good
members
 of
society
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • moral values
  • ethics
  • influence
  • instilling
  • role models
  • civic sense
  • social responsibilities
  • character building
  • diverse exposure
  • socialization
  • teamwork
  • cooperation
  • educational curricula
  • citizenship
  • collaborative approach
  • community involvement
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