Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these wiews and give your own opinion.

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It is often argued that should
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learn about how to be perfect
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of
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from their
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or
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? Even if
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has a lot of benefits for
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, I completely agree with
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should learn to be good
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of
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by their
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all, I would like to tell about why
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have
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an important
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role
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teach
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children
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to be
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person
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of
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? When
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people were
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, they try to learn everything about life.
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want to be a big
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such
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as their father, mother even if their big brother or sister so that parent’s role
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critical for them.
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, if
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do not teach
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about how they should to behaviour their adults,
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may not be
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kind or respectful
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person
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. Overall,
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should teach their
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about everything which is important for them.
On the other hand
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, some people believe that
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must
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to how
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good
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of
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from
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. They have some reasons for why they support
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idea
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, They think that while
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do not look at their
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as
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instructive but they look at their teachers as
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instructive.
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, when teachers give
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an idea
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idea
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about any topic,
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believe that
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idea
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is correct and they behave as their teacher’s
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,
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often act
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children
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emotionally.
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situations
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should be a logical
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against their
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, they do not act like that. In conclusion, People who agree about
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should learn from
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have a lot of correct reasons
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however
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, I strongly agree that
parents
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should teach their
children
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about how to be good
members
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of
society
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • moral values
  • ethics
  • influence
  • instilling
  • role models
  • civic sense
  • social responsibilities
  • character building
  • diverse exposure
  • socialization
  • teamwork
  • cooperation
  • educational curricula
  • citizenship
  • collaborative approach
  • community involvement
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