You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter: say how you feel about his performance give details of your musical activities explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

Dear Sir, I am writing
this
letter to express my feeling about the concert of yours which was held in Pune city. It was a pleasurable moment for me to see you live at the concert. I would like to mention to you that your performance was outstanding. I discovered that almost everyone has enjoyed your songs. I believe you will be a shining star of Hollywood as well as the way you had performed. After reaching home, I forced myself to do regular practice of singing as I
also
have a dream to become a professional singer like you.
Moreover
, regular singing would help me to achieve
such
desired goals. The best way you can help me is by recommending some brilliant music schools so that I can join. I believe professional teachers of school would guide in the right direction.
Also
, it would be great if you can create some youtube videos which will help me to deal with many obstacles. I hope to hear from you soon. Yours Sincerely, Swati Arora
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