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Illiteracy continues to be a concern for many countries in the world today. What are the causes of illiteracy in the modern world, and what effects does it have on the people concerned and on society as a whole?

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In Mongolia, 98% of all adults are literate but,
Illiteracy
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 continues to be a concern
for
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 countryside areas. There seem to be two main causes and three effects, which we will discuss here. Possibly the main cause is to be far away from cities which
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 electricity, transport and modern needs. Another well-known cause is having parents who are illiterate.
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, Herder families do not give a lot of concern
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 their children’s education
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 causing the rise of
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 levels. The effects of
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 problem on
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 generation can be quite serious.
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 results in increased dependency ratios. Since illiterate young
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 end up becoming jobless or
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 enough choice to do another job, they rely on the financial support of their family and
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continue what their family do. A
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widely-observed
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 impact is
people
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 in the society become illiterate,
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 results
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 generational
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.
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 causes an increase in poverty levels.
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 with little or no education end up getting
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 jobs.
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, having illiterate parents and living
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in rural
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 areas seem to be the main causes, and they affect
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generational
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,
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 an increase in poverty levels of
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Literacy
  • Illiteracy
  • Poverty
  • Access
  • Educational resources
  • Social inequality
  • Discrimination
  • Gender disparity
  • Racial bias
  • Cultural norms
  • Technological advances
  • Political instability
  • Disruption
  • Education systems
  • Socioeconomic status
  • Job prospects
  • Health implications
  • Self-esteem
  • Empowerment
  • Economic growth
  • Social cohesion
  • Civic participation
  • Democratic processes
  • Exclusion
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