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Some people think children should have the freedom to make mistakes, while other people believe that adults should prevent children from making mistakes. Discuss both sides and give your opinion?

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Freedom
 should have to
children
 to make
mistakes
 is believed by some people, while other people say their elders like
adults
 should prevent them from making
mistakes
.
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an
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 to shed light on both views and I will discuss my views in the ensuing paragraphs. Admittedly,
children
 should have the
freedom
 to make
mistakes
 due to certain reasons. The
first
 and foremost is to get aware of
mistakes
. Parents should provide full
freedom
 to their pupils, by which olive branches make the numerous number of
mistakes
 in their
life
 due to which broods get to know about the solution of that
mistakes
 and
then
 get scared to do that thing in their
further
life
 again ,
,
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however
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 some parents do not give
freedom
 to make
mistakes
, so the government should
also
 impose few laws that
children
 have the
freedom
 to do
mistakes
. Undeniably,
adults
 should prevent
children
 from making
mistakes
 due to several reasons, the prominent one is can share their
life
 experiences . In
this
 contemporary era, mostly seeds spend their ample
of
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time on their mobile phones by using different sort of social media apps
such
 as Instagram and Facebook due to which pupils do not spend time with their elders and make many
mistakes
 in their
life
 ,
however
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adults
 should prevent
children
 to make
mistakes
 by sharing
life
 experience that how much
mistakes
 and difficulties they had a face in their
life
 and how bad solution of that
mistakes
 was , because of
this
 olive branches get some moral ethics and do not do that
mistakes
 in their
life
 again, which
also
 help broads in their future. After analysing all that the facts , it can be concluded that
children
 should have the
freedom
 of doing
mistakes
 due to get aware of that
mistakes
 in future, pet
adults
 should prevent pupils from making
mistakes
 by sharing their
life
 experiences due to which olive branches get some moral ethics.
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