Today more people are overweight than ever before. What in your opinion are the primary causes of this? What measures can be taken to overcome this epidemic
People
nowadays are more obese than ever before.in this
essay I will discuss about
the reason and solution to Remove the preposition
apply
this
problem
. it is obvious that obesity is in people
are complicated. Firstly
,these days people
eat a lot of fast food
in their life which have
led them to overweight. for ,Instance Change the verb form
has
people
are busier then
ever before they go for a job early in the morning and come back home at late night from the workplace.so Replace the word
than
instead
of cooking , they buy food
from outside and some of them try to save moneyAdd the comma(s)
, therefore,
therefore
they buy cheap food
such
as burger, hot dog and other fast foods.the solution is for the company to decrease the duty time
of the people
of those who don't have time
to cook their own meal at home , which would allow people
to make healthy food
for themselves. Another problem
is that,
most of the Remove the comma
apply
people
are started their life to living in cities besides
in the village.That is
to say,people
often have to deal with the exercise places such
as tracks, Playing ground for civilians,and even more.which often cause them to overweight because they do not to
play games Change the verb form
apply
such
as football,cricket etc and mostly they feel to lack to trails for running and walking.Which forces them to lie down in the bed after the meal and also
in the morning running time
.to tackle this
issue, cities mayor must be built a running track for people
and also
run an obesity campaign. a third
cause of the problem
is that people
get those products which have a lot of fat ingredients.most people
eat sweets and purchases
them easily without any restriction. which mean that they have complete freedom to buy and eat everything. to handle Change the verb form
purchase
this
issue will be that the government need to increase the tax on unhealthy food
so people
find too
hard to buy. To sum up, obesity has become much more in many countries Correct pronoun usage
it too
people
.due to reasons Change preposition
for people
such
as eating fast food
and do not have to time
to exercise . This
is a serious problem
, and unless we don't stop to eat
fast Change the verb form
eating
food
and do
some physical activities. Wrong verb form
doing
people
will suffer from fatness.My view is that the main responsibility for solving the problem
lies with the people
and government.Submitted by hameedsarmad03 on
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.
A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).
Stick to this essay structure:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion