Some people argued that having money makes people happy, some says that having too much money only brings problem. Do you agree or disagree?

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The number of rich
people
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has been increased nowadays drastically creating the argument that more
money
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shall only create issues.
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, I completely disagree with the statement analyzing the fact that only inefficiency to handle
money
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will cause problems.
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, there
are
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a myriad of possible ways to utilize
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money
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to create happiness.
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, the most crucial problem among
people
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while owning too much fortune is improper financial management.
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, when we have too much
money
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, we lose our ability to think naturally in a straight and proper way causing inefficiency in handling
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.
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,
people
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forget to nourish their existing relationships causing trouble in life.
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, more
money
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means, more fame and
people
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have become public eye without any other efforts.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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