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Is using air transport to export fruit and vegetables to countries where they can not be grown a positive development?

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With the growth in aviation, people believe that
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 transport is a good transportation mode for exporting food
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 as vegetables and fruits. I disagree with
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 statement. Because it causes many serious problems for health.
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 essay will express my point of view in the following paragraphs. On the one hand, many supporters believe that there are many benefits of transporting products by planes to countries where are not available.
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, It gives them a chance to try all kinds of foods.
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, in cold countries, it's impossible to grow some sorts of fruits like bananas and olives.
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, it leads to uplift the economy of both countries by selling and buying the products.
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, none all of them would have been possible without
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 transport mode.
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, the danger of
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 that does the environment and mankind outweigh the positive points. The main disadvantage is polluting the environment
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 because
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 transit builds a huge amount of dust and toxic carbon because of the powerful engines.
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 causes global warming which is a serious pressing issue and many serious problems for human's health as well.
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, in India because of heavy
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 transport conditions people try to purchase oxygen to intake fresh
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.
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,
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 would not have been possible without controlling
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 traffic congestion. To sum up,
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,
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 transportation has some merits, the demerits outweigh the positive points. After a thorough analysis on
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 subject, I believe that more
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 traffic means more
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 pollution.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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