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Advertising is all around us, it's an unavoidable part of everyone's life. Some people say that advertising is a positive part of our lives while others say it is a negative one. Discuss both views and include your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 180 words.

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Nowadays advertising has gained popularity all over the world. Most companies advertise their
products
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 because they want to be more successful in their business. There are some advantages of advertising.
First
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, one of the advantages is that advertising could help companies find appropriate customers interested in buying their particular
products
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.
Secondly
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, advertising, a billion-dollar industry, has been highly profitable compared to other fields, creating numerous jobs and occupations for millions of
people
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 worldwide. They
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 always help customers because while commercials are broadcast, they get valuable information about where to buy these
products
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. Some
people
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 believe promoting is useful when looking for a particular product.
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, some others claim that advertising unintentionally influences our private lives. Of course, there are many disadvantages. Companies that want to promote their product have to pay for the advertisements.
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, not every company has enough money to do that. Another disadvantage is that some
people
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 can be annoyed by those advertisements and decide not to buy their
products
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. In conclusion, none of us can escape advertisements. I firmly believe that
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 advertising possesses several advantages, its disadvantages are more significant, effective advertising manipulates
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 to believe manufacture is vital for life
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