Some people feel that there should be a fixed punishment for each type of crime. Others feel that the circumstances of an offense should be taken into account when deciding on a punishment. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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I am Novita Sari, graduated (GPA 3.77 of 4.00) from Kwik Kian Gie School of Business, Jakarta,
Indonesia
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, in 2015, majoring in Economics, concentrating in Accounting. I highly commit to
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for
Master
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Degree program; 1. Master of
Finance
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of Cornivus
University
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of
Budapest
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, 2. Master of
Finance
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of
Budapest
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University
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of Technology and Economics. I worked for Indofood CBP Sukses Makmur Tbk as an Internal Auditor after graduation. Many aspects in manufacturing business cycles have been audited,
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as
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, compliance and process.
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job has sharpened my analytical thinking and problem-solving skills since I have to ensure if there is still room for improvement.
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of my biggest contributions to the company was when I saw a significant rise in
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overtime pay in the financial statement.
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, I observed and found that the amount calculated by payroll officers was bigger compared to the government regulation in
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.
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, the company’s
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shown in the financial statement looked smaller than it should be. After that, I decided to give a comprehensive recommendation so that efficiency can be achieved, and profits in the financial statement reflect the actual situation. As my current work is focusing on improvement in the company that has already been running for years, for my future master’s lesson, I intend to focus studying on how to help Start-up companies or Small and Medium Enterprises, that have just run their businesses either with their owned capital or with
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from foreign countries, allocate their capital effectively and efficiently. I am inspired by people around me who have just built their businesses but have to close their businesses due to financial problems, especially in
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pandemic.
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, I found it important to improve my knowledge of
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. At the same time, I would like to take part in realizing
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of the sustainable development goals of the United Nations about decent work and economic
growth
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that aim to encourage the formalization and
growth
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of Small and Medium Enterprises, including through access to financial services. I would like to start from my motherland,
Indonesia
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. I choose
Cornivus
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University
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of
Budapest
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because it is recognized by the Institute of Chartered Financial Analysts (CFA), and the core modules offered include ‘Investments’ and ‘Applied Business Valuation’ that will strengthen my skills.
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, I am already excited as it has a financial laboratory
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equipped with Bloomberg and Reuters terminals to support my study.
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,
Budapest
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University
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of Technology and Economics is
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of the universities that I would like to study in since it is accredited by
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Institute and
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Association of Risk Professionals (GARP). Similar to Cornivus
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,
Budapest
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University
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offers ‘Investments’ and ‘Valuation of Enterprises’ compulsory modules to enhance my knowledge.
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of the challenges that I may face while studying abroad is language, but I am eager to learn both English and Hungarian language to support my study in Hungary. Upon gaining a master’s degree, I plan to work in the government, particularly in the Ministry of
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, to implement what I have learnt for economic
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in
Indonesia
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. As
one
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of the emerging market economies, my home country has been received lots of
investment
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. Hungary is
one
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of the key partners for
Indonesia
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as the
investment
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reached US$ 1.5 billion in 2020.
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, I really hope to be accepted into your master’s degree program. It will be
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a privilege to experience
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education in Hungary. Please, accept my deepest appreciation and gratitude for your
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assessment and consideration.
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