Nowadays doctors can become very rich. Maybe they should not focus on profitable activities such as plastic surgery or looking after rich patients and concentrate more on patient's health, no matter how rich they are. Do you agree or disagree?

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Being a doctor is one of the top-paying professions in the world today causing debate among people. Some say clinicians ought to not focus on income-generating activities
such
as plastic surgeries or provide extra care to high-class people.
However
, I disagree with the statement analyzing that being a doctor is a costly process,
also
, the aforesaid argument is not only meant to earn money. One of the main reasons to support my argument is, all the doctors are not keen on earning money always as some of the situations when their job becomes an undeniable help.
In other words
, when patients met major accidents causing their skin completely damaged the role of the plastic surgeons stand. It is not only a business but
also
an irreplaceable help. In
such
cases, doctors provide a
second
chance to patients in their life.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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