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Some people think that money is one of the most essential factors in promoting happiness. Do you think people can be happy without much money? What other factors contribute towards happiness?

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Money
 is the primary reason to rise humans
happiness
. That’s the point of view for some
people
 and I totally agree with them.
However
, other
people
 think that it is not necessary to have a huge number of
money
 to be happy, since there are many other factors that could increase
people
’s
happiness
. Nowadays, the fund becomes the most important factor for happy and luxurious life. If you are wealthy, you will be able to go on vacations in your country and travel around the world. So, your power and
happiness
 will rise up while you are spending
money
 and enjoyable time.
Furthermore
, housework
such
 as cooking, cleaning the home, watering the garden and taking care of children, requires energy, effort and time.
Therefore
, having
money
 let you have maids and homeworkers to help you do your homework.
Also
,
money
 offers you to live in a castle, which it is mean living in a luxury house.
However
, there are a lot of other things that would increase humans’
happiness
. Living with family and having a good relationship with relatives and friends make
people
 feel cheerful and less stressed. That’s because they stand with him when he falls down.
Also
, having good health is much more important than
money
. While some
people
 who have huge amounts of
money
 suffer from health diseases and illnesses.
As a result
, they need to spend a lot of their
money
 on their health.
Money
 has one of the highest points of attention from a lot of
people
. Because it helps them to make life easier and gives them energy in many different methods.
However
, sometimes fitness and family might give
people
 energy more than
money
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Promoting happiness
  • Essential factors
  • Financial stability
  • Material wealth
  • Personal fulfillment
  • Contentment
  • Basic needs
  • Maslow's hierarchy of needs
  • Social connections
  • Pursuing passions
  • Well-being
  • Mental health
  • Spiritual practices
  • Personal growth
  • Community service
  • Societal contribution
  • Philanthropy
  • Joy
  • Satisfaction
  • Prosperity
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