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Some people say that doing multiple tasks at the same time can be beneficial. However, others are against this view. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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These days, an increasing number of
people
 are concerned about the effects of multitasking on our lives.
However
, whether
people
 should do more than
one
 task at the same
time
 is a controversial issue. I believe that it is better to stop multitasking.
To begin
 with, there is no doubt that doing parallel work can cause stress and pressure.
This
 is because individuals have to cope with a huge amount of work as well as meet various deadlines at the same
time
. Another shortage of multitasking is lowering efficiency. Facing w
ith p
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lenty of information would lead the outcome to be inadequate due to lack of
time
 and concentration.
For example
, studies pointed out that comparing the exam results of a group of students who do multiple tasks with a group of students just f
ocuses
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on a single duty at once, the
second
 group performs better. Because of these reasons, I can not support doing so.
On the other hand
, lots of
people
 do m
ultitasking
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because of its positive effects.
One
 of them is saving
time
. Compared to s
ingle tasking,
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 solving lots of problems at a
time
 would take less
time
. Another positive
one
 is that multitasking would increase citizens’ responsibility.
This
 is because they have to make sure all tasks have to be done while it’s stressful and p
ressure.
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 In conclusion, there are some advantages of multitasking including saving
time
 and increasing responsibility. Meanwhile, causing stress and reducing efficiency are some main shortcomings of it. In my perspective, the benefits are not worth it for
people
 doing multiple tasks. By stopping multitasking, and starting focusing on a single
one
,
people
’s productivity would more likely to rise up.
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