In many countries, young people are finding it harder and harder to find permanent jobs. Why is this? What can be done to improve the situation?

Recently, young adults are having difficulties in finding
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jobs
.
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essay will explain the reasons for
this
phenomenon and suggest ways to solve the problem. On the one hand, the reasons are twofold. The main reason is that many young people find their
job
unsuitable for themselves. They do not get well understanding
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their careers, so after they have worked for a period of time, they may find it not suitable for them. They will choose to change to another
job
which they think is more interesting.
As a result
, youngsters may find it difficult to find permanent
jobs
. Another reason is that employers are not willing to hire long term
workers
. The salaries of
part time
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workers
are much cheaper than permanent
workers
, so many
companies
prefer hiring
part time
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workers
.
On the other hand
, there are two methods to solve the problem.
Firstly
, schools can provide some courses to allow students to get
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understanding
to
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their careers.
For instance
, students can know the
job
requirements and the
job
duties, so they can decide which career is really suitable for them.
Moreover
, the government can encourage
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the company
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company
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companies
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to hire young adults by providing
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. The government can provide
subsidy
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to
companies
if they provide permanent
jobs
for youngsters, it can create incentives to let
companies
to
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hire them.
Therefore
, teens will have a higher chance to get a
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job
. To conclude, the reason why youngsters cannot find
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positions is
because
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they do not get enough understanding of their
jobs
and
companies
do not pay a higher salary,
however
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there are still ways to solve the problem.
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