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An increasing number of people now are using the Internet to meet others and socialise. Some think this has brought people closer together while other think people are becoming more isolated Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #internet #socialise #think
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The majority of the population feels that the world wide web is most commonly used these days
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, others feel by using
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internet
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. In today's
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 all things are based on the
internet
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. lonely.So, we are discussing both views in upcoming paragraphs When we go to the market We use
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internet
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 by paying the bills.
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,small children are
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 using word wide web
thought
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through
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 online classes. So, we can say that it has
wide
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 area in
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 life.
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 of
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 people can contact our feelings through chit chat.
On the other
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hand
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 some person feels it
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makes
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maks
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makes
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more
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them more
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 lonely to each
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other
others
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 people have no time to meet someone. Or we can say that they don't have time to meet or celebrate family functions.for
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 if in their families someone is suffering from fever they will not prefer to meet them , they just call
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and
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 how you are now that's it.That's why some people feel
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internet
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the internet
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 make us very
lonly
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lonely
. After reviewing both the views we can conclude that
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internet
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the internet
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 has more useful for all
type
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 of
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generations
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