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Some people support the development of agriculture like factory farming and scientific creation of food beneficial whilst others oppose. Discuss your opinion.

#people #support #development #agriculture #factory #creation #food #whilst
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Every living being
in
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this
 earth
demand
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a
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food
a portion of food
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food
 as a basic
needs
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need
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, having enough
food
 bank for each country is one of the main
concernt
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concerns
. Due to the high demand, many new ideas like scientific creation and factory farming become the most welcoming trend nowadays, while there are still some against it, including me. In our current century
itself
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 organic
food
 become very limited due to the
usage
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users
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 are getting less.
Markething
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Marketing
 and
over produce
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overproduce
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 factory's
product
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products
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 are everywhere in the store which stored and displayed at
first
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 rack to
atract
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attract
 the
purchasers
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purchaser's
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 attentions. When the buyers are less automatically the producing will effected and the
tradisional
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traditional
 way of
agricaltures
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agriculture
agricultures
 are effected
inderectly
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indirectly
 too.
Moreover
, as every individual knows nothing can be
comparisable
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comparable
 with
natural
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, there is not
scitifically
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scientifically
 proved that all human creations can be equally
same
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the same
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 as naturals. Everything needs
a
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apply
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time, Making
food
 grow fast or get ripe quick by poisoning them in name of called
fertelized
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fertilized
fertilised
 some chemicals. In my opinion, every
buyers
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 must double consider the benefits
in
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of
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 organic farming before picking others.
However
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 it is not only giving support to the
agriculture
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agricultural
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 people but
also
 a big gift for our future generations to avoid
consume
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consuming
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 artificial foods daily.
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