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Some people think that teenage years are the happiest times of most people’s lives. Other thinks that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of the greater responsibilities. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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The supplied bar chart highlights with regard to the information of the production and consumption of
electricity
 in units of
billion
kWh
 across ten
countries
 in the year of 2014. Over the conducted research, it can be spotted that China belongs to the
first
 rank in the top ten
countries
. A more detailed look at the given chart affords to infer that Chineses produce 5,398
billion
kWh
 and consume 5,322
kWh
billion
 of
electricity
. At the same time, the United States consists of the
second
 country in the world, which produces and consumes a large number of
electricity
. According to the bar chart, we can conclude that Americas use 3,866
billion
kWh
 of
electricity
 per year and create slightly more than consume.
Nevertheless
, figures on the production and consumption of
electricity
 in Russia are significantly less
in contrast
 to both United States and China and is composed of 1057
billion
kWh
 and 1038
billion
kWh
 of the production and consumption respectively.
Also
 is noteworthy that all
countries
, which were included in the survey, produce more
electricity
, rather than use it.
However
, figures on intake and creation of
electricity
 in the Korea Republic are lower compared to other
countries
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Formative years
  • Autonomy
  • Fulfillment
  • Wisdom
  • Significant choices
  • Exploration
  • Financial responsibilities
  • Deeper relationships
  • Personal growth
  • Accomplishments
  • Character development
  • Life milestones
  • Adulthood
  • Adolescence
  • Carefree nature
  • Achievements
  • Life satisfaction
  • Stress-free
  • Independence
  • Responsibilities
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