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Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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Advertising is the most popular activity to promote the
product
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 and services.
People
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 have different views on
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, while some consider that It is the best method to convince
people
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 to purchase certain products , others believe that
people
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 are not interested anymore since they consider it is normal. In my opinion, I still think that advertising is the most
effective
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 way to attract
people
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 in order to utilize or consume products and services. It is true that advertising can bring the biggest impact on the growth of
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sales.
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 achieved through receiving the awareness of
brand
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the brand
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 from the
people
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, and their desire to try the
product
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. From my perspective, advertising can touch
people
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's emotions and feelings through stories, plot, music and even the brand ambassador, which urges them to realize the need to use the
product
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. Take Mcdonalds as an example, they doubled the revenue through the collaboration of their new
product
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 with global K-pop - Star, BTS, not only because of the popular stars who endorsed them but
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 the design of the packaging contributes to the promotion of the
product
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 to hit the
jack pot
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.
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as
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with
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 the existence of celebrities online influencers, attractive design and presentation of
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product
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the product
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 in visuals and videos, advertising still remain,
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the best method to raise the sales level.
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, some
people
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 claim that
people
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 are tired of
advertisements
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 since they are seeing them frequently does not have any significance anymore. As the majority of
advertisements
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 follow
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 similar style with variations in
story
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a story
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 on
plot
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the plot
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 in advertising,
people
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 tend to lose interest as they are shown repeatedly without any creative
value added
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value-added
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 to the
advertisements
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, the
product
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 cannot make a breakthrough in the market.
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,
people
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 often skip online
advertisements
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 a lot these days, as they feel annoyed, consider
that is
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 time-consuming, and
those
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that
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 are not worth
to pay
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paying
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 attention
.
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to.
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 Tol
conclude
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, there are conflicting views with regards to advertising, whether they are still useful as a form of promotional tool or just a waste of money because of
lack
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a lack
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in
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of
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people
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's attention. I am of the opinion that advertising is still vital till
digital
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the digital
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 age, but innovative ideas and creative solutions should be more incorporated
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 them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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