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These days, many people are interested in buying organic food even though it is often more expensive than conventionally produced food. What are some reasons that people prefer organic food? Do you think it is important to buy organic food despite the higher prices?

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There is no doubt that
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the consumption
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 of organically cultivated
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 is good for people’s health, and
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 important reasons why people prefer organic
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 over / to conventionally grown
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. I think it is important to consume organic
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 even though it is expensive. One of the main reasons why people think organic
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 is beneficial is the role it plays in the reduction of
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 pollution.
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 is because organic farming strictly uses plant and animal waste for fertilizers and avoids the usage of chemical fertilizers.
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, air and water pollution will reduce considerably.
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, recent studies show that chemical fertilizers
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 one of the most important factors which turn fertile agricultural land into barren land on which no crops can grow.
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 is another important reason for preferring organic
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 over conventionally produced
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. Another reason why organic
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 is being considered is the health benefits it offers to humans. Unlike conventionally produced
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, organic
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 is good for preventing illness. To illustrate
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, recent studies have shown that a number of diseases are caused by the consumption of fruits, vegetables and grains treated with pesticides. To conclude, organic
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 is becoming more popular because its cultivation and consumption benefit both the people and
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society.
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 it is expensive, it is healthy and eco-friendly.
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