I am writing this letter to provide some information about my personal background, demonstrate my study plan in Canada for the Graduate Certificate in Business Analysis programe

Studying in Cannada require

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to pay

tuitions

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tuition

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and expenses.

Comparing

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to the previous certifications that I get in Australia and the U.S.A which is around $150,000 to $200,000

averagely

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taking both living

expense

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expenses

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and tuition into account,

this

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course is quite affordable with just around $40,000 totally.

These cost

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will be paid from my

saving

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account, which I have accumulated during years of my

working

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. Other than my

professioanl

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professional

career and education, I am

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a father of a

Candian

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Canadian

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girl and my wife who is

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qualified to visit Canada regularly. We are currently living in Hochiminh city in an affluent residential area located in

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Phu district. It has been 2 years that my family do not visit Canada due to the pandemic,

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I might take

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to Canada to visit couple

months

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during my education. In brief, business analyzing and data programming skills are

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high demand in Vietnam and

global

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the global

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market. I want to get the certification to enhance my

knowlege

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knowledge

and professional career. Thank you for your consideration. Yours faithfully.

thaibinh11287

Jan 14, 2022

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

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5 paragraphs

177 words

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I am writing this letter to provide some information about my personal background, demonstrate my study plan in Canada for the Graduate Certificate in Business Analysis programe

The Greeting

You are organizing a conference for your company. Write a letter to a colleague asking him/her to give a presentation during the conference. Describe what this conference is about. Why you want him/her to give a presentation. Give details about the conference

Some people think international car-free days are an effective way of reducing air pollution, others think there are better ways. Discuss both views and give your own opinions.

Some people think that the modern communication technology is having negative effect on social relationships. To what extent do you agree or disagree

th the increasing demand for energy sources of oil and gas, people should look for sources of oil and gas in remote and untouched natural places. Do the advantages outweigh disadvantages of damaging such areas?