I am writing this letter to provide some information about my personal background, demonstrate my study plan in Canada for the Graduate Certificate in Business Analysis programe

Studying in Cannada require
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and expenses.
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to the previous certifications that I get in Australia and the U.S.A which is around $150,000 to $200,000
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taking both living
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and tuition into account,
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course is quite affordable with just around $40,000 totally.
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will be paid from my
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account, which I have accumulated during years of my
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. Other than my
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career and education, I am
also
a father of a
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girl and my wife who is
also
qualified to visit Canada regularly. We are currently living in Hochiminh city in an affluent residential area located in
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Phu district. It has been 2 years that my family do not visit Canada due to the pandemic,
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to Canada to visit couple
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during my education. In brief, business analyzing and data programming skills are
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high demand in Vietnam and
global
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market. I want to get the certification to enhance my
knowlege
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and professional career. Thank you for your consideration. Yours faithfully.
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