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‘Everybody should donate a fixed amount of their income to support charity.’ How far do you share this viewpoint?

#‘everybody #amount #income #support #charity
There is an idea that
people
 ought to give some part of their income
for
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the
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charity
. I agree that
people
 may donate to
charity
,
however
 not everyone should do it, and I will explain why in
this
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Firstly
, even for worthy causes the donation should be
voluntarily
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 not by regulation. Everyone has the right to spend their own money
however
 they like, it can
be include
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 donating
for
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charity
 or buying something else. Forcing
people
 to donate is equal to what formal taxes do. A second negative factor is related
with
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 financial
problem
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. Most
of
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people
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 can’t provide their
ever rising
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 use by their salaries and, nothing is left behind
it
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for donating.
For example
,
in
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many countries face inflation during the pandemic
it
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result
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to
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everyone in their life directly. These reasons impact
increasing
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 amount of
people
 who need support
while
 reducing givers. Admittedly, donating in fact has many positives related to the individual and the community. Contributing
on
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consistently
in
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a
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charity
 leads to open opportunities for
individual
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an individual
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such
 as those who need their help and for
charity
 institutions to
extent
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 their support to the poor. There is another positive aspect experience more pleasure. It appears that donating money will lead to a
high
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 contented frame of mind.
For example
, some
people
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 about the poor more than themselves and they always want to give doesn’t matter what they
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.
To conclude
, it seems to me that if the financial assistance were to be compulsory, the
donators
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would be discontented and the nature of donation as a voluntary act would be under question.
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