‘Everybody should donate a fixed amount of their income to support charity.’ How far do you share this viewpoint?

There is an idea that
people
ought to give some part of their income
for
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charity
. I agree that
people
may donate to
charity
,
however
not everyone should do it, and I will explain why in
this
essay.
Firstly
, even for worthy
causes
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the donation should be voluntarily not by regulation. Everyone has the right to spend their own money
however
they like, it can
be include
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donating for
charity
or buying something else. Forcing
people
to donate is equal to what formal taxes do. A
second
negative factor is related
with
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financial
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problem
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problems

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. Most
of
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people
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can’t provide their
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use by their salaries and, nothing is left behind it for donating.
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, in many countries face inflation during the pandemic it
result
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to everyone in their life directly. These reasons impact
increasing
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amount of
people
who need support while reducing givers. Admittedly, donating in fact has many positives related to the individual and the community. Contributing
on
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consistently in a
charity
leads to open opportunities for
individual
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individuals

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such
as those who need their help and for
charity
institutions to
extent
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the extent
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their support to the poor. There is another positive aspect experience more pleasure. It appears that donating money will lead to a high contented frame of mind.
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, some
people
concern
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about the poor more than themselves and they always want to give doesn’t matter what they left. To conclude, it seems to me that if the financial assistance were to be compulsory, the donators would be discontented and the nature of donation as a voluntary act would be under question.
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