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Nowadays in many countries woman have full time jobs. therefore, it is logical to share household task evenly between man and woman. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement.

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In
this
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 modern era,it has been observed that most
females
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 are engaged in full-time employment.
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,it is obvious that
both
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 males and
females
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 must equally contribute to household activities.I completely agree with
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 notion because the living standard of the family has Rosen.
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,
females
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 prefer to become independent.I would like to explicate my views in the upcoming paragraphs.   To commence with, nowadays,in
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 status focused period,it has become very difficult to survive with an individual's income,
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 making it compulsory for
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 the couples to participate eventually.
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 mostly cases of depression,anxiety has been reported in the families where the whole family is dependent upon a single bread earner. Ultimately providing support eventually in monetary terms will not only improve the healthy relationship among the couples but will
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 enhance their living standard.
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 to it,we are living in a world where women's can free to follow their career and mostly it has been predicted that
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 wanted to become independent and for that they usually prefer working in the offices.For ,example in developed nations like Australia a piece of news depicted that 9 out of 10
females
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 prefer working.In the end,it becomes vital for
both
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 the partners to divide their schedules related to home activities and work
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. To recapitulate,I completely assert that
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 males and
females
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 must contribute eventually in the home tasks which will not only improve their relationship but
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 they can tackle serious health-related issues.In the end,it will lead to the growth of an economy as
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 males and
females
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 are pillars of society.
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