Many old buildings are protected by law because they are part of a nation's history. However, some people think old buildings should be knocked down to make way for new ones because people need houses and offices. How important is it to maintain old buildings? Should history stand in the way of progress?

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of old
buildings
are protected by law and authority because they play an important role in a nation’s rich history.
However
, it is thought by some individuals that old complexes,
structures
and
buildings
should be demolished to make space for people's living spaces and working place to
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of necessity over history. It is clear that protecting old
buildings
and
structures
have impacts and effects on the way of modern advancements and progress and should be underestimated.
First
of all, old
buildings
and
structures
play an important role in many countries as they protect the country’s cultural heritage as well as
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untold tales from the past.
For instance
, a lot of bunkers and prisons from the Vietnam War was either demolished or reconstructed after the war lost many of its main features and historical values .
Therefore
we need to preserve our histories and cultures through the use of preserving old
buildings
and man-made
structures
. These historic
buildings
do not slow down or weaken advancement of any kind because it has
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own role to play in modern society because
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large amount of progress from each individual’s country mainly depends on old relics to
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how far they have advanced and how long it took them.
For example
, the Long Bien bridge located in Hanoi that was constructed from 1898 to 1902 have gone through 2 separate wars that have
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many of
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parts and almost causing it to break down, it was later rebuilt
from
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around the 1960s and
it’s
still in use today for transportation purposes as well as a tourist attraction. From that, we can conclude that history contributed a lot of factors to progress and not hindering or slowing it down. In summary,
although
replacing old
buildings
with new ones can be beneficial to
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around the world but
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think
it’s
more important to preserve these old
buildings
to
show
our new generations about how our country used to look like in the past as well as
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them the untold tales about it in the past.
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