In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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in
a
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several countries it is thought by some
people
that to invest a large amount of money to establish new railway
lines
for
high speed
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trains between cities is essential. Others consider that money ought to be spent on developing existing public
transportation
. In my opinion,
to spend
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money on new railway
lines
can be more beneficial in terms of speed, environment, danger and a modern world. On the one hand, it is necessary to build brand new
lines
for railways to set up express trains to connect cities together in the matter of creating a modern world which has more comfort, less air pollution and higher speed ,
for
instance
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if
a
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public
transportation
takes two hours to arrive, the trip can be finished in 20 minutes with an express train.
Furthermore
, there will be
less
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traffic problems for the simple reason that it does not require driving skills. All in all, it makes it possible for
people
not to waste the time.
On the other hand
, not every person think like that. It is because there is a group of
people
, who believe that public funds should be spent on fixing or improving the previous public transports.
However
,
to improve
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modes
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of
transportation
that already exist is not
considerable
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because these days anyone can already get around the city easily due to various transit like taxi, bus, subway and carpooling.
Hence
, developing current transport will not make a huge difference. In conclusion, new
lines
may give some
people
the opportunity to save a lot of time and
the
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substantial things, whereas fixing the existing
transportation
can not fully
supporting
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our new modern life.
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,
to establish
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establishing

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railways is a beneficial investment for the government and
the
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society because
people
will get rid of accidents, they can transfer to other cities easily and they will be less harmful to the environment.
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