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Ensuring that children have regular physical exercise should be the responsibility of parents and therefore schools should not waste valuable school time having sports lessons as part of the curriculum. To what extent do you agree.

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The quality of education in school has increased over the years. The debate is going on for a long on who is more responsible for the fitness of
children
,
schools
 or
parents
. In
this
 essay, I am going to discuss how obesity is affecting us, how
parents
 and
schools
 both are responsible for the physical
exercise
 of
children
 and
also
 why I disagree with
schools
 not wasting their valuable time having
sports
 lessons. Over the years, obesity has increased quite a lot. With all that food chains and ready to eat packets, we are moving towards more and more diseases in our bodies. Diabetes and other sugar-related problems are on the rise. Once a wise man said, "Your true wealth is your health". It really resonates with me. Is our health worth sacrificing for education? Both
parents
 and
schools
 are responsible for the physical and mental health of the upcoming generation. The newer generation of
children
 lacks awareness about the advantages of a fit body and regular
exercise
. To make
children
 aware of the benefits of
physical
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, I believe
schools
 should have at least 2 classes each week where students must perform an
exercise
 for an hour or play some sport. In Asia, it is common for the
parents
 to ask the
children
 to study for long hours
instead
 of out playing or hanging out with their friends. So sometimes
parents
 neglect the physical
exercise
 of the
children
 because of studies. That's where
schools
 come into play.
Also
 if
children
 are active physically and play some
sports
, it increases their brain function and hand-eye coordination. Apart from that, they
also
 learn sportsmanship. Physical
exercise
 has both mental and physical benefits. To summarise, If
sports
 are restricted from the
parents
,
children
 looks forward to coming to school and enjoying physical
exercise
.
Children
 already have so much on their plate regarding studies, by adding some
sports
 class or letting our
children
 play in the fresh air, we make sure our
children
 are not stressed.
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