You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Using a computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on your children. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

This
is a world of technology. With technology comes lots of dangers and disadvantages. When we say technology, the
first
thing that strikes everyone's mind is
computer
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the computer

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, which has almost become a family member in every family. It mainly attracts
children
because of quite many reasons which is a curse for them. I support
this
by
elobarting
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elaborating

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using examples in the
next
paragraphs. These days we can see a house without many basic things but definitely not without
computer
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a computer

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. It may be because of
parents
wanting their
children
to get familiar with it as early as possible or
children
forcing their
parents
for playing video
games
,
watching
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watch

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movies etc. Whatever may be the reason,
computers
are the culprits that
has
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have

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increased distance between
parents
and
children
or
grand
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grandparents

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parents
and kids or between friends or between many other relations by keeping
every one
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everyone

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busy. We used to see
children
crying for their
parents
to take them to
park
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the park

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for playing or asking their
parents
for permission to play with their friends outside. But these days it has completely reversed. Even though
parents
beg their
childern
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children

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to play outside or ask them to come to
park
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the park

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with them, they won't go, which is due to attracting video
games
on
computers
. Computer video
games
has
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have

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completely replaced outdoor
games
of
children
which indeed has decreased the physical strength and immunity power of
children
. Not only that
,
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but,

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it
also
affects
children
's eyes with its
refelction
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reflection

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of blue light. If we go
any where
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anywhere

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we see people always carrying their laptops with them. Whether it may be a social gathering, family party, birthday, death day or a
marraige
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marriage

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, people never visit without laptops or mobile phones.
This
reduces the
face
to
face
communication
between people which increases the gap.
This
is one of the main reasons why present
children
doesn't
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don't

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know much about
about
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apply

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their relatives and friends. To
conlcude
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conclude

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,
computers
affect
children
physically. It
also
affects mentally by making
children
shy to communicate with others
face
to
face
as it replaces direct
communication
with indirect
communication
by providing online platforms for
communication
. So, allow
children
to use
computers
only when required to nourish them physically and mentally healthy.
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