In many places new homes are needed but the only space available for building them is in the country side. Some people believe that it is more important to protect the country side and not build home there. What is your opinion?

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It is true that housing is an important issue in many regions of the world but the land is only available at the outskirt of cities for construction.

Although

some hold the view that it is crucial to saving villages, I believe that it is

also

better for the villagers

also

. On the one hand, there are various reasons to protect the countryside .

First

and foremost, greenery in those places is contributing to providing oxygen in the whole area. More number of trees means more quantity of oxygen in the air which is important for a healthy environment.

Last

but not least, the requirement

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houses is more in cities so it will be a wastage of money to build residential complexes in remote areas.

For example

, industrial areas in Pakistan are located in cities only so residence for employees is required in downtown centres near their working facilities.

Therefore

, it is best to save villages from becoming concrete jungles.

On the other hand

, there are a number of factors which can contribute to satisfying the need for houses by building them in far regions.

Firstly

this

kind of commercial activity will play an important role in the prosperity of residents.

For instance

, people will earn more when the availability of job opportunities will increase with the development in that sector. It will not only save time for them

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but

also

reduce travel costs for them if they live near to their industry.

In addition

, tourism will

also

be improved in

this

way. As more attraction for tourists lies in those points so the better living facility will attract more visitors.

Thus

, it is an important step which authorities can take to improve village side

also

. In conclusion, to satisfy the need for more houses, I think that building housing societies in distant regions is crucial for any country for its overall development.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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314 words

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In many places new homes are needed but the only space available for building them is in the country side. Some people believe that it is more important to protect the country side and not build home there. What is your opinion?

Include an introduction and conclusion

In many countries are investing new technology to deal with the public. Why it is happening? Do you think it is an appropriate use of goverment money?

Nowadays there is a tendancy to relocate overseas for lucrative jobs.While a faction of people holds the notion that this movement is challanging (?)for juveniles, others argue that it is better for children.

Childood obesity is an increasing problem in Australia as many as two thirds of children are now obese. Schools have a responsilbility to monitor what their students eat and the amount of exercise they do. To what extend do you agree to this statement?