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All cars that burn fossil fuels should be banned and electric cars should replace them.

I strongly believe that fossil fuels should be banned because of the
emission
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 of CO2 and global warming issues.One of the
solution
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 to avoid irreversible global changes is to develop our transport to be completely electric. Fossil fuels lead to dramatic world
crisis
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 in the future. due to burning these planet
resources
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 we have to face
an upcoming global warming problems
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upcoming global warming problems
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.
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 is because of the
emission
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 of carbon dioxide and other toxic fumes created by cars. Recent studies
has
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 shown the
emission
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 of Co2 over the past few decades has grown rapidly and it’s constantly expanding due to
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transport usage.
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example
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 we produce over one million more carbon per year than back in
the
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1978 which is crucial to the health of a planet. It’s
also
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 true that if we don’t reduce
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emission
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 by the end of
a
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 current decade we’ll be living in
the
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 different world on an overheated planet fulfilling our lungs with
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dirty air. We can’t deny the fact that electric cars are more
environmental
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 friendly.
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 is because of their autonomic electrical battery usage. With that in
mind
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 gas
emission
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 is reduced to zero.
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 Elon Musk’s Tesla company declared that their batteries are fully recyclable and changeable which extend the life of a car which means
less
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 resources will be wasted in
environment
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the environment
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. In
conclusion
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 to stop the progressive climate
changes
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 all fuel engines need to be regulated to use, forbidden and replaced by electric cars. In my
opinion
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 there’s so much more that can be done in case of
global
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 crisis.
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, burning fossil fuels is still one of the main global issues to consider
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in our modern living era.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fossil fuels
  • emissions
  • air pollution
  • greenhouse gases
  • climate change
  • sustainable
  • renewable
  • electric vehicles
  • battery technology
  • charging infrastructure
  • range anxiety
  • government support
  • incentives
  • subsidies
  • renewable energy
  • environmental impact
  • energy efficiency
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