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It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between the finishing school and going to the University. What are advantages and disadvantage?

#year #school #university
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Over the
last
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 two or three decades,
students
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 have been going to universities tremendously than ever before due to
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globalisation. It is an often argued issue whether
students
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 should be taken a
year
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gap
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 between
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completing
school
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 and
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going
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gong
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going
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 to
the
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college
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, or not.
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,
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benefits
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 and drawbacks following reasons.
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 with, there are many
benefits
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 to taking a
year
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gap
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 between
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. One of the major advantages is that
pupils
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 can save more money from any work, and
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, they can pay the
college
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 fees by
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 earnings as well as savings too. Another advantage is that one
year
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gap
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 between finishing
school
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 and going to
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higher studies can give more experience towards life
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 as
independent
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an independent
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 lifestyle, and
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, many countries'
pupils
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 follow
this
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trend
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.
For example
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, in Sri Lanka,
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the education
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 system follows a
year
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gap
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 between completing
school
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 and going to
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university;
as a result
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,
theirs
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their
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 country
student
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students
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 get more experience and they can save money for
theirs
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their
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 education.
Therefore
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,
this
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trend
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 has more
benefits
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 for
students
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 as well as parents.
In contrast
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, there are some drawbacks to taking a
year
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gap
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 between finishing
school
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 and
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university. One of the major disadvantages is that many
pupils
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 do not like to study continuously because they go to employment and settle
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 life, and
therefore
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, will not study
further
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. Another
disadvantages
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 is that sometimes
students
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 forget
to
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theirs
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their
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 academic syllabus due
a
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year
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gap
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,
this
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 can lead to forgetting all academic curriculum.
For instance
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, a
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recent
 report from the Times of Sri Lanka said that more than 60% of the
school
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 finishing
pupils
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 do not like to continue to theirs higher studies in
college
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 due to the
gap
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 between grade twelve and
college
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 like a
year
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. To conclude, saving money and getting more life experience is the advantage of
this
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trend
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;
forgeting
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forgetting
academic
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the academic
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 syllabus and
unwilling
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being unwilling
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 to
further
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 study is the disadvantages.
However
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, in my opinion, about
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,
this
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trend
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 has more drawbacks that outweigh the
benefits
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gap year
  • work experience
  • internships
  • traveling
  • life experiences
  • personal development
  • independent
  • self-reliant
  • educational progress
  • graduation timeline
  • financial burden
  • academic momentum
  • structured academic environment
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