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It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between the finishing school and going to the University. What are advantages and disadvantage?

#year #school #university
Over the
last
 two or three decades,
students
 have been going to universities tremendously than ever before due to
the
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globalisation. It is an often argued issue whether
students
 should be taken a
year
gap
 between
the
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completing
school
 and
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going
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gong
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going
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 to
the
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college
, or not.
However
,
this
 essay discusses it briefly for the
benefits
 and drawbacks following reasons.
To begin
 with, there are many
benefits
 to taking a
year
gap
 between
this
. One of the major advantages is that
pupils
 can save more money from any work, and
thus
, they can pay the
college
 fees by
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 earnings as well as savings too. Another advantage is that one
year
gap
 between finishing
school
 and going to
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higher studies can give more experience towards life
such
 as
independent
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 lifestyle, and
therefore
, many countries'
pupils
 follow
this
trend
.
For example
, in Sri Lanka,
education
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 system follows a
year
gap
 between completing
school
 and going to
the
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university;
as a result
,
theirs
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 country
student
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students
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 get more experience and they can save money for
theirs
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 education.
Therefore
,
this
trend
 has more
benefits
 for
students
 as well as parents.
In contrast
, there are some drawbacks to taking a
year
gap
 between finishing
school
 and
the
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university. One of the major disadvantages is that many
pupils
 do not like to study continuously because they go to employment and settle
theirs
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 life, and
therefore
, will not study
further
. Another
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 is that sometimes
students
 forget
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theirs
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their
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 academic syllabus due
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year
gap
,
this
 can lead to forgetting all academic curriculum.
For instance
, a
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recent
 report from the Times of Sri Lanka said that more than 60% of the
school
 finishing
pupils
 do not like to continue to theirs higher studies in
college
 due to the
gap
 between grade twelve and
college
 like a
year
. To conclude, saving money and getting more life experience is the advantage of
this
trend
;
forgeting
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forgetting
academic
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 syllabus and
unwilling
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 to
further
 study is the disadvantages.
However
, in my opinion, about
this
,
this
trend
 has more drawbacks that outweigh the
benefits
.
Submitted by reanudeepan on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gap year
  • work experience
  • internships
  • traveling
  • life experiences
  • personal development
  • independent
  • self-reliant
  • educational progress
  • graduation timeline
  • financial burden
  • academic momentum
  • structured academic environment
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