Some people think that the best way to become successful in life is to get a university education, whereas others say this is no longer true. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Many successful people don'
t
have an educational institution. They are successful because of their hard work and knowledge. Some people say that you need to have an academic
degree
to become successful while others are not agreeing with that. I think that you don'
t
need a
university
degree
in order to become successful in your
life
. In the
next
paragraphs, I will give my opinion and reason to prove that. I will say that if you want to become successful in your work that came from the education you received
then
you need a
university
degree
. Because in order to get a job you have to have a
degree
and extra knowledge to gain the experience. After 5-6 years you will become successful in your company. In the
university
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,university

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you will receive a hands-on experience
that is
somehow similar to real-
life
, and the professors will train you
accordingly
. In these cases, you need a
university
degree
to become successful in
life
.
On the other hand
, if you don'
t
have a
university
degree
still you can become successful in
life
. You need to have experience, knowledge and money to do what you want to do and try harder. You will achieve success in the coming years. If you have the mind to do something you just need to get money for it and the resources to start up something or expand something. After some years you will have everything you want and you will be happy with your
life
To put it in a nutshell, I think that you don'
t
require a
university
education to become successful
instead
you just need mind, money and resources.
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