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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

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 numbers of hungry citizens based on advances
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 so, most of them are hungry. The
second
 cause is
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drought
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people
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 Denmark after the world war. To conclude, the against of agriculture evaluation, still some
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 on government cooperation with citizens and providing
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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