Many people believe that media coverage of celebrities is having a negative effect on children. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Media
coverage gives
adverse
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an adverse
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effect
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effects
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on offspring around the world due to
children
can influence
effortlesssly
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effortlessly
. More and more think that
children
are having adverse
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repercussions
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by
media
focus of
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renowned
renewed
folks.
Therefore
, I strongly agree with
this
statement and
this
essay discusses it briefly for the following reasons. To commence with,
media
and television always give repercussion on
children
becuase
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because
they cannot think too much like youth,
therefore
, many television focus only
offspring
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on offspring
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and they telecast many
program
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programs
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for offsprings.
For instance
, many Indian
channel
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channels
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telecast offsprings program for attracting countless babies
such
as Sutti TV.
In addition
, offsprings focus can be diverted from academic to entertainment-related
such
as recording Reels like well-known people,
thus
, they might
be affect
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a negative side.
Furthermore
, since childhood period
children
should be
concenrated
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concentrated
on valuable things which
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are
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academic, skills and sports. These kinds of activities can only
getting
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be getting
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good lifestyle rather than addicted to watching renowned folks.
For instance
, a recent report from the Times of India said that more than 60% of the offspring cannot give
a
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full attention to
theirs
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their
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education due to celebrities influences.
In addition
,
media
attention not only distracts
children
's education but
also
reduces
theirs
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their
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intrest
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interest
towards
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specific skills and
sportrs
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sports
.
Therefore
,
this
trend always provides more
repercussion
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on offspring. To conclude,
media
attention always gives more adverse effects on
children
in various ways. They can reduce
theirs
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eduaction
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education
level as well as specific talent too.
Therefore
, I strongly agree with
this
statement in-above mentioned details.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Celebrity culture
  • Glamorization
  • Unrealistic expectations
  • Self-esteem
  • Scandals
  • Role models
  • Moral development
  • Mental health
  • Influence
  • Exposure
  • Social media platforms
  • Charity work
  • Inappropriate behavior
  • Perfection image
  • Negative impact
  • Inspire children
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