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Many people believe that social networking sites ( such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extend do you agree?

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It is believed by a number of
individuals
 that, social interaction platforms like Facebook
has
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 detrimental effects
to
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on
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individuals
 as well as society. While it is true that these sites can negatively affect
the
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societies
, I believe that they are beneficial to
individuals
. On the one hand,
individuals
 tend to benefit from these social sites.
Firstly
, they can easily connect with their long lost friends as well as communicate with family members near and far.
Secondly
,
individuals
 can find people they have not seen or heard from in a long time. To
examplify
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exemplify
, at a click of a button someone can find people or activities related to their search and can share pictures, videos, call or directly message friends and family.
On the other hand
, while it may be beneficial to
individuals
, using social networking platforms can negatively affect
societies
. Since the gadgets used for these socializing applications are not shared,
this
 means that everyone will be glued to their gadget more thereby not giving chance for interaction with those around them.
Societies
nolonger
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no longer
 have time to meet physically to play or learn from one another as there is more reliance on socializing and playing games on these sites. To conclude, the use of social interaction platforms are beneficial to
individuals
 and not helpful for
societies
 and communities.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • erosion
  • face-to-face
  • interactions
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • misinformation
  • polarize
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • procrastination
  • productivity
  • social isolation
  • dissemination
  • breeding ground
  • vast amounts
  • personal information
  • mental health
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