Some people think that keeping pets is good for children while others think it is dangerous and unhealthy for them? Which viewpoint do you agree with?

Certain people believe that having a
pet
at home is beneficial for kids,
although
the opinion of others change as
it’s
considered
as
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unhealthy and harmful for kids. I partially agree with the given statement. 
Further
examining the given idea, having a
pet
and the harmfulness differs according to the type of
a
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pet
. If
it’s
a dog or a cat, it could be dangerous because of rabies and the illness caused to
lungs
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due to their fur. Even though there is no danger in keeping a parrot or a fish as a
pet
. Most of the parents worried about the fur of dog and cats as
it’s
proved to be unhealthy for
children
who
has
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breathing issues
such
as asthma. Adding to
this
, there is a high risk of getting bitten by them and most probably
get
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victims to rabies and
apparently
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it’s
considered
as
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a deadly disease. 
On the contrary
, some people
also
think that
it’s
a
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better to have a
pet
accompanying the
children
all the time. When there is a
pet
,
subsequently
children
become more sensitive towards animals and they develop an inner connection with them. At the same, it aids to improve their mental health.  
It’s
said that
children
with pets depicts more love and care about the people or things that are
surrounded
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them. Playing with them,
feed
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them and looking after them involves a considerable time  and gradually they learn how to take care of someone.  To conclude, I would be agreeing partially on having a
pet
at home for
children
as it can be harmful and unhealthy for them,
also
it can be helpful to develop their mental health
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