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Some people believe that educational success depends on good teachers, while others believe that students attitude is important. Discuss both views and give you’re opinion.

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The educational system around the world is made to take the maximum out of both, teachers and learners.
Although
 some people argue that educational achievement depends
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primarily
 on teachers, others are of the opinion that it is based on
students
 attribute. In
this
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 I believe that
students
 play the main role in their own education. On the one hand, it is
professor's
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 job to teach the
students
 in the most effective way they can and to
enourage
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encourage
students
 for
further
 education. Learners find it more enjoyable to study when they are already familiar with
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.
Moreover
, there are many
researches
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 proving that
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interactive studying is much more efficient than passive, especially in
strenghtening
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strengthening
student's
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 capacity to memorize the material from the class. There are many ways of active teaching that are proved to be effective, including visual
presenations
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presentations
 and brain maps,
for instance
. The more effort a teacher makes, the easier it will be for
students
 to make progress.
On the other hand
, if a
student
 is not willing to
to
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cooperate, a teacher is powerless.
Moreover
, it is not the job of the professor to force the
students
 to study and even if he would like to do so, it will
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probably
 not be possible.
Furthermore
, if the
student
 is ambitious and diligent, achieving
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educational success would be possible even without any effort
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 the teacher. A great instance for
this
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self-education, where
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people around the world succeed in learning the languages or playing the instruments.
Hence
, it all comes to a
student
's approach to education and more importantly, his temperament. To sum up, having a great professor might encourage
students
 process of learning and vice versa, but
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 it is the learner whose obligation is to work on their future.
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