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Children are facing more pressures nowadays from academic, social, and commercial, perspectives. Which are the causes of these pressures and what measures should be taken to reduce these pressures?

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It is an unavoidable reality that
children
 are under lots of
pressure
 from school, society and
workplace
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the workplace
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.
This
 essay intends to discuss the causes of these pressures and the way to alleviate the problem. I believe
children
 must be shielded from
such
 mounting
pressure
 by holding some counselling sessions to help them out of some serious mental problems. The main
pressure
 comes from school since nowadays because of the social media, students should compete not only with the
child
next
 door, or even of one’s town or country, but
also
 they must be in competition with the
child
 of the global village.
Moreover
, the parent’s expectations are not realistic these days.
Therefore
,
children
 should tolerate a huge amount of stress.
For example
, the majority of guardians force their
child
 to be a doctor, whereas they are totally aware that it’s not their
child
 passion. To overcome
this
 situation, the educational institutions must arrange some counselling classes for students and their guardians to discuss
about
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this
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these
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 issues and tell them these situations would be perilous for
child’s
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a child’s
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 health and they can cause some mental diseases like stress, heart attack and anxiety. So,
although
 parents are really interested in having a successful
child
, putting lots of
pressure
 on them will have reverse
result
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results
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. In conclusion, since
children
 are living in a modern age, they have to be in competition with all the world.
Moreover
,
the
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unrealistic parents' expectations might cause some mental problems for
children
.
Therefore
, it is a great idea to tackle
this
 problem with some counselling sessions in school for
children
 and their parents.
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