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you recentely receved a letter from a freind asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try tp get a job. you think she should get a job. write a letter to this friend. in your letter - Say why she would not enjoy going to college - explain why getting a job is a good idea for her -suggest types of jobs that would be suitable for her

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Dear Emily, How are you doing? it is almost two years that we didn't write to each other, I received your letter about your hesitation in choosing to continue in your study or to search for a job opportunity. The decision of going to college at
this
 stage of your life is not essential and I feel that you will not be happy with that choice because you have some responsibilities to your family as far as I know. I strongly suggest that it is better for you to find a job because you need the job at
this
 stage more than the master degree, you already finished high school and you should get some work experience that helps you with living expenses. as well,
then
 you can postpone the master degree for the
next
 year. With your qualification, I believe that you could search for teaching, administration, or office jobs all these jobs are matching with your study. I hope my advice sounds logical to you and wish you all the best. See you Soon
Submitted by eng.ahmed.mohamed.2007 on

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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