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Throughout the history, people dream to build a perfect society while they haven’t agreed how the ideal society would be like. What is the most important element you think to make a perfect society? How do people do to achieve an ideal society?

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From an aeon of time, many have tried to draw a perfect/ idea/ impeccable image of an ideal
society
 without truly understanding the essence of it. Too many, if not all the rulers failed miserably in achieving
such
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goal
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 through the course of history and doomed their community. The key factor to prefect a
society
 is
the
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 certain amount of liberty offered to its members and defining correct boundaries for them. The reasons why I believe so are discussed in the following essay.
To begin
 with, limiting individuals by any means has always proven to produce negative results.
People
 usually tend to defy what was forced on them and only by offering certain
freedom
 and rights, do individuals find themselves comfortable and help the community boom.
In addition
,
although
 it might seem
contradictive
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 to what has been mentioned before, the government must set an example of an ideal community by implementing rules and regulations for
people
 to follow as too much
of
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freedom
 could have detrimental effects on nations. It can be said that the art of keeping a balance between these two with taking into consideration the needs of
people
 is the key to perfection. It is clear that under no circumstances can a nation burgeon without the help of its
people
. With the
freedom
that is
 offered, individuals can find unique ways to help their civilization.
In other words
,
a
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freedom
 of speech can give the privilege to
press
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 to expose
corruptions
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 and clear
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society
 from it.
On the other hand
, obeying the rules set by the higher authorities keeps the nation away from chaos and disruption.
For example
, the government can pass
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penalty
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 in the national assembly which not only will prevent
people
 from selling or exporting drugs, but
also
 keep them away from addiction. To recapitulate, Balancing the two
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 of a scale with
freedom
in
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 one side and setting boundaries on the other side, in my view, is the key to
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an ideal
society
.
Nevertheless
,
people
 are a big part of achieving
such
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 and without their help, no matter how well governments try, it wouldn’t be attainable.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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