Since science and technology are becoming more and more important in modern society, schools should spend more time on teaching these subjects rather than on arts and humanities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Science
and
technology
, in recent years, are becoming more and more essential. It is a tough table issue that which kind of subject should the campus spend more
time
on. I tend to agree that
schools
concentrate more on teaching
science
and
technology
rather than on arts and
humanities
.
To begin
with, courses related to
science
and
technology
,
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should provide more practical skills. The whole
society
is full of high
technology
in
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nowadays. Grasp these skills not only convenient to our life but
also
improve the quality of our job. Obviously, people will be eliminated
in
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social competition if they have less knowledge about these.
Moreover
, the person will
gets
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more job opportunities which acquires much more
science
and
technology
skills. With the
developing
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of many
technology
companies, more and more
science
talents are needed. So
society
will welcome a large
quantity
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of people who is good at
this
area. At
last
, since
science
and
technology
are the
primary
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productive force. Campus spending more
time
on teaching these
subjects
can cultivate more talents
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this
field.
Then
they can contribute their ability to the thriving of our
society
.
Although
science
and
technology
subjects
are very important, art and
humanities
have equal
statu
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status
.
First
of all,
schools
should develop every
subjects
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to
fulfill
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everybody’s different needs. There is
also
a large number of people
prefer
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who prefer
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art and
humanities
, they want to make a great achievement on arts and
humanities
. We should respect their opinions.
Besides
this
, we need
multicultural
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not only in school but
also
in
society
. So
schools
should balance the
time
of each
subjects
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according to the students’ demand. Above all, each subject is very essential. Due to the heavy needing of
society
,
however
, I tend to agree that
schools
make more
time
on teaching
science
and
technology
rather than arts and
humanities
.
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