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In recent years, more and more people are using to read e-books rather than paper books. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

#years #people #e-books #paper #books
It is often argued that many people nowadays
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 devices to read
books
 than hard materials. It is my view, the advantages of reading electronic
books
 do outweigh the disadvantages, particularly in the areas of
convenience
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the convenience
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 of the reader and less cost of e-
books
.
Firstly
, the prime advantage of
reading
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the reading
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book
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books
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in
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on
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 the device is more
convinience
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convenient
convenience
 to use. even if a person wants to read while
go
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 to work or even in the travel
this
 makes them easier to read and
therefore
 do not need carry a
book
 with them always.
Meanwhile
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 there is
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plenty of choices to read.
For example
, Even if someone
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uses
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tab
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a tab
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 to read
book
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the book
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, they have
varities
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varieties
 of choices to read on it, not like in hard
books
 that they have to choose one by one.
This
 shows
that
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why
majority
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the majority
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 of
public
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the public
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 prefer reading
books
in
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on
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 electronic devices.
Secondly
, The
second
 important advantage is
inexpensive
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the inexpensive
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 of e-
books
. The cost of
books
 has been increasing since starting of the technological reading pattern. The price of e-
books
 are cheaper than raw
books
 these days because of
this
 many students and researchers prefer to read
books
 in the
the
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format of electronic.
For instance
, Most
of
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the
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college students prefer to read
many
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any
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book
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books
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 related to their studies
however
 they can not purchase all the
books
 but
in
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on
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the device
a device
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devices
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device
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,device
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 they could purchase
books
 for
lowercost
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lower cost
lower-cost
. In conclusion,
majority
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the majority
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 of
crowd
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the crowd
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 prefer reading
books
 in the form of
electronic
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electronics
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becuase
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because
 of easy access to
varities
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varieties
 of topics and the amount that
invloved
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involved
 in
raw
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the raw
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 material
book
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books
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more
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is more
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 and more expensive than reading on
device
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the device
a device
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.
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