Many goverments think that economic progress is their most important goal,however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is believed by some
people
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that most of the higher authorities focused on the economic
progress
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of a
country
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.
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, others think that other types of
progress
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are equally important for the
developments
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.
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, I reckon that both subjects are equally important for a
country
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. It is
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well known
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fact that some
people
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find, economic
progress
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are play
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a vital role in every
country
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which is very important for
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apply
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developments
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development
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.
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, by doing
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things a government can provide better services to their citizens because
people
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want to get more and more services
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can help them in their livelihood.
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, by getting
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kind of taxes on
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and on transportation, on other useable things and so on.
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,
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can raise their economy. All in all, it is essential for providing good facilities.
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, some
people
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considered that other types of
progress
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are very essential for a
country
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.
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, a good education
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an indispensable role in everyone's life.
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, without
education
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people
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cannot do anything. So the more
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is needed in the education sector. Apart from that, medical facilities can be improved because health is wealth. Howbeit,
transportation
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the transportation
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system is
also
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very important which can help us to reach our destinations.
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the end, all the
developments
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are very important. In conclusion, Some governments think economic
progress
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is needed for the
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developments
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development
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of a
country
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, while others believed that other types of
progress
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are important. From my viewpoint, both can be considered equally for better progression.
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