Tge two maps show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.

Tge two maps show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.
The maps which are given below demonstrate the transformation of the
island
before and after being facilitated with many tourist amenities. From an
overall
perspective, surprisingly, trees remained in the same location,
moreover
,
bunch
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of entertainment sites and resorts construed in the modernization period. First of all, before the construction,the area was quite empty.The
island
had just several trees and
surrounded
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by sea and it
also
had a beach on the west side of the
island
.
However
, the
island
underwent many changes and installed a number of facilities which
is
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made the
island
as
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the
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tourist destination.The reception and the restaurant
built
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in the central part,
besides
that,there
is
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two residential sectors
in
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on
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the
island
which are connected to each other with a particular route system.
Finally
,the figures illustrate a few amusement states manufactured nearby the shore and
also
a pier erected on the south edge
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island
for transport visitors by boats.
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