Tge two maps show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.
The maps which are given below demonstrate the transformation of the
island
before and after being facilitated with many tourist amenities.
From an Use synonyms
overall
perspective, surprisingly, trees remained in the same location, Linking Words
moreover
, Linking Words
bunch
of entertainment sites and resorts construed in the modernization period.
First of all, before the construction,the area was quite empty.The Correct article usage
a bunch
island
had just several trees and Use synonyms
surrounded
by sea and it Add a missing verb
was surrounded
also
had a beach on the west side of the Linking Words
island
.
Use synonyms
However
, the Linking Words
island
underwent many changes and installed a number of facilities which Use synonyms
is
made the Unnecessary verb
apply
island
Use synonyms
as
Change preposition
apply
the
tourist destination.The reception and the restaurant Correct article usage
a
built
in the central part, Add a missing verb
are built
besides
that,there Linking Words
is
two residential sectors Change the verb form
are
in
the Change preposition
on
island
which are connected to each other with a particular route system.Use synonyms
Finally
,the figures illustrate a few amusement states manufactured nearby the shore and Linking Words
also
a pier erected on the south edge Linking Words
the
Change preposition
of the
island
for transport visitors by boats.Use synonyms
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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