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Individuals can do nothing to help improve the environment. Only government and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#individuals #environment #government #companies #difference
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It is believed by some experts that people cannot do anything to protect
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nature and they consider just
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lawmakers
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law makers
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lawmakers
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 and multinational corporations can support
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 issue.
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, I agree with
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 aforementioned notion
of
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because
government
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the government
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 should organise campaigns.
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,
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an individual
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individual
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 should take the responsibility to overcome
the
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environment
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environmental
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 issues. On the one hand side, some superiors prefer that only higher authorities and other industries are
responsible
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to
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 the protection of
environment
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 rather than the citizens of a society.
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, with the help of making
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 kind of strictest rules.
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, governments should allow
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noise free
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 machines for the production of goods in companies which can stop to rise noise pollution.
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, they should organise awareness campaigns for providing knowledge about the importance of
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nature and how can they protect their livelihoods.
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, large industries should use eco-friendly products which can recycle time to time.
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, they should use
noise free
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machineries
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machinery
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 which can create no pollution and give a big hand to protect the green areas.
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, just government and large organisations cannot solve these issues but
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 individuals should take the responsibility and they should use that type of products which can
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 easily in less time.
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, they should plant
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 of trees in their gardens and
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 in other areas of their towns. Because, by plantation of trees, they can grow insects which can help us to make a
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balance
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 cycle between the people. In conclusion, I reckon that higher authorities and large corporations can be helpful to improve the environment.
Howbiet
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, individuals
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 should take the responsibility to support the environmental issues.
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