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Individuals can do nothing to help improve the environment. Only government and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#individuals #environment #government #companies #difference
It is believed by some experts that people cannot do anything to protect
the
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nature and they consider just
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lawmakers
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law makers
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lawmakers
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 and multinational corporations can support
this
 issue.
Therefore
, I agree with
this
 aforementioned notion
of
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because
government
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the government
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 should organise campaigns.
Although
,
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an individual
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individual
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individuals
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 should take the responsibility to overcome
the
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environment
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 issues. On the one hand side, some superiors prefer that only higher authorities and other industries are
responsible
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to
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 the protection of
environment
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 rather than the citizens of a society.
Moreover
, with the help of making
such
 kind of strictest rules.
For example
, governments should allow
the
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noise free
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 machines for the production of goods in companies which can stop to rise noise pollution.
Although
, they should organise awareness campaigns for providing knowledge about the importance of
the
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nature and how can they protect their livelihoods.
Additionally
, large industries should use eco-friendly products which can recycle time to time.
Also
, they should use
noise free
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machineries
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machinery
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 which can create no pollution and give a big hand to protect the green areas.
On the other hand
, just government and large organisations cannot solve these issues but
also
 individuals should take the responsibility and they should use that type of products which can
recycle
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 easily in less time.
Furthermore
, they should plant
number
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 of trees in their gardens and
also
 in other areas of their towns. Because, by plantation of trees, they can grow insects which can help us to make a
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balance
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 cycle between the people. In conclusion, I reckon that higher authorities and large corporations can be helpful to improve the environment.
Howbiet
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Howbeit
, individuals
also
 should take the responsibility to support the environmental issues.
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