Some people prefer to directly help or support people who need it in the local community, however, others prefer to give money to national or international charities. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is believed that many
people
provide help to their local
people
as they prefer keeping
charities
locally as a duty towards their community, while others prefer sending these
charities
to
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overseas to assist
people
globally. I believe that giving
money
to international
charities
is more beneficial to those
people
who live there as it makes the whole globe financially stable.
First
of all,
people
who like sending these alms to their locals believe that their community deserves
these
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money
more than others.
Moreover
, they state that the whole wealthy
people
in the society should look after who needs support.
For example
, they might know who is in low income and provide support to them.
Hence
, it will make the locals live better and strengthen the bond between local
people
.
On the other hand
, some
people
including myself believe that sending
money
to national or international
charities
may aid
people
who
in
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really need
such
as providing help to
people
in poor countries where most of the population
their
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live
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under the poverty line.
Furthermore
, these national or international organizations work hard and set up plans every year to help
people
. So, they will ensure that
these allocated
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money
will be delivered to moneyless
people
. From the above mentioned, it can be concluded that giving
money
to local
people
will make the community more connected to each other,
however
, sending these
charities
internationally might help
people
to survive as many of them barely have
money
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • philanthropy
  • grassroots
  • non-governmental organizations (NGOs)
  • altruism
  • donation
  • volunteer
  • sponsor
  • beneficiary
  • transparency
  • accountability
  • advocacy
  • impact
  • scalability
  • community development
  • fundraising
  • non-profit sector
  • humanitarian aid
  • social responsibility
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