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Modern lifestyles are completely different from the way people lived in the past. Some people think that changes have been very positive, while others believe they have been negative. Discuss both these points of view and give your own opinion.

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The pie charts below illustrate the mean percentage of nutrients which will be unhealthy if over consumes in typical meals of US citizens. Overall, there are 3 nutrients which are
sodium
, saturated fat and add
sugar
.
People
 tend to eat unhealthy food in the evening because
sodium
 and fat show a
significant
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 of being consumed in a dinner, whereas
sugar
 is a substance
that is
 highly consumed on snacks.
To begin
 with, 43% of
sodium
 and 37% of saturated fat come from the dinner meal.
Moreover
, the launch is another meal that
people
 eats much of
sodium
 and fat which are 29% and 26% respectively.
In contrast
, breakfast is the meal the
people
 tend to eat less
sodium
 and fat.
Sugar
 shows the different times of being consumed. Snack is the mean that
people
 consume
sugar
. 42% of it being consumed in
this
 time. For other meals, breakfast, launch and diner display slightly consumed which are 16%, 19% and 23% respectively.
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