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Recent research has shown that media like the Internet and TV have a greater influence over people's lives than politicians. Which do you consider to be the greater influence?

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Recently, a social issue related to
media
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 and
politicians
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 which brings bigger
influence
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 has been widely discussed. Some argue that
politicians
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 play a more important role in citizens. As far as technology and globalization are concerned, I strongly hold that
media
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 have a greater
influence
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 over
people
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's
lives
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.
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 with, with the development of technology,
media
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 have been spread over
people
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's
lives
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. No matter children or adults get information from various kinds of
media
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. it would
influence
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people
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's minds significantly.
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, children who like watching violent programs may commit violent crimes.
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, nowadays, individuals can watch many programs from other countries with different cultures. An unknown culture may attract a person strongly because
people
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 usually ignore the programs with a culture
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 familiar to them. Just like my neighbour Yu Qian, who is very interested in the culture of Japan. It is undeniable that
policies
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 are enacted to discipline the lifestyles of residents.
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,
politicians
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 know that they would be opposed by residents if the
policies
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 change
people
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's
lives
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 too much. So the majority of
policies
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 just influent a small part of
people
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 or have a slight
influence
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 over our
lives
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.
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, the Chinese government banned mining online several months ago. It just influent the miners'
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instead
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 of most of the citizens'.
On the other hand
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,
policies
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 lack drama so a few
people
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 will pay attention to
politicians
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. In conclusion,
media
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 is playing a significant role in our daily life at present. they have a bigger
influence
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 over citizens'
lives
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 than
politicians
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.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

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  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

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  • The disadvantage of this...
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