Today there is a great increase in anti-social behavior and lack of respect to others. What are the causes of this? What measures can be taken to reduce this problem?

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The discussion on the special topic of social behaviour has aroused a great repercussion at home and abroad. One of the biggest
concern
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is that anti-social behaviour has increased very fast in the whole
society
in
the
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recent year. It is very essential to understand why
this
happens, which
is
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can help to keep a harmonious, safety and stable
society
. The factors that cause people antisocial are very variable. On the one hand, education is a vital part of humans’ lives, which has a large probability of affecting people’s life direction. Most
school
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place more emphasis on academic education than on common sense and
behavior
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formation. The
less
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students know about
society
, the more likely they will try wrong
behaviors
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out of curiosity and become criminals or form dangerous personalities that do great harm to
society
.
On the other hand
, children without enough parents’ attention are more likely to have a dysfunctional childhood and growth environment, those kids tend to engage in bad
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in order to attract parental attention.
Therefore
,
government
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needs to
built
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a better educational system that includes knowledge of social behaviour in order to spread the right moral values and point to a brighter future for young people. At the same time, parents should spend more time with their
younger
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.
This
not only induces
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crime
,
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but
also
promotes good parents-children
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and
thus
reduces the incidence of mental illness. To sum up, most
of
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people's
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the people's
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behaviors
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are formed during their teenage years, and more efforts should be made by parents and schools to reduce bad
behaviors
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Anti-social behavior
  • Lack of respect
  • Instilling values
  • Discipline
  • Supervision
  • Media influence
  • Behavioral issues
  • Moral education
  • Community engagement
  • Economic disparity
  • Frustration and alienation
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