In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

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control of their heaviness and they are not in superior condition and fit. The origins of

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it seems according to the developing of equipment and even public transportation, the

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people do less movement and activity,

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and social networks have been replaced, there are no physical activities in front of computers and

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increasing weight

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decreasing their fitness. In order to solve the problem of obesity and lack of

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there are several remedies but it seems one of the most important steps to settle these problems is

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to force or at least encouraging adolescents and youth to spend at least one

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. Another preparation that could be considered is restricting the hours that young people even

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are in front of

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, they most probably will resist in front of these limitations but eventually will find out itʼs benefits for their health conditions. In

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it seems developing of

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changing in the kind of enjoying and playing could be the main causes of these problems and the solutions are considered forcing for work out for youth and limitations for playing computer

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unhealthy diet
fast food
urbanization
modernization
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In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

Fully explain your ideas

Children nowadays spend a great deal of time watching T.V . However, TV cannot replace the book as a learning tool,which is why children are less well educated today,to what extent do you agree with this statement ?

Some think that young people should be free to choose any career they like, while others say that they should think more realistically about their future. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your experience.

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems.

Air transport is increasingly used to export fruit and vegetables to countries where they cannot be grown or are out of season. What the advantages and disadvantages of this?

Nowadays, education overseas has become more accessible and growing numbers of people send their offspring to study in other countries. However, this trend has its detractors. I strongly believe that the pros far outweigh the cons, and will examine both below.