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Some people feel that boarding schools /where students or pupils live at the school during term/ are an excellent option for children, while other people disagree for a numbers of reasons. Consider both sides of this debate and reach conclusion.

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It is often said that entering into a life of boarding
school
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 means a big change in a child’s life.
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,
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 issue is not entirely straightforward, and arguments can
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 be made against the idea.
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 essay will discuss the debate, and give a concluding view. On the one hand, those who not
supports
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 boarding
school
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on
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apply
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children
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 cite
stress
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that
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of
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 spending all of the time at
school
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. It can never have an environment of casualness like home.
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 would bring intense periods of stress for
children
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.
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, When
children
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 are left at the boarding
school
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, one of the first emotions they start to feel is the feeling of loss and abandonment. Another argument is
children
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 might suffer
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bullying or abuse. Often senior students or even teachers force power and abuse little
children
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 in many ways.
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, when they live away from their parents, in a boarding
school
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, they do not have the 'protective shield' over them.
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, they become bold and fearless, ready to face any undesirable situation alone. Examples can be seen in countries, where most parents choose a boarding
school
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 for their
children
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. They become experts at managing their time, money and resources.
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, it must be said living away from home setting provides invaluable opportunities for personal growth. Boarding
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 students are often exposed to a wider range of activities to broaden their learning.
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, it seems that a child going to a boarding
school
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 will spend considerably more time there than at a day in regular
school
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, which will influence their cultural and
psychical
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physical
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 development and educational progress.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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