In many countries, people are moving away from rural areas and towards urban areas. Why do you think that is? What problems can this cause?

Nowadays, in some countries, there are
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people
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interested
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in
city
life
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life
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better
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life-style
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.
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the
city
usually
suffer
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with
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some difficulties
such
as
over crowded
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, traffic congestion and job
inabilability
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unavailability
. On one hand,
in
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the country
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countryside
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country side
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countryside
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, there is
lot
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of lack of modern facilities.
Firstly
, there
is
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no educational institutions at
university
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the university
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level so
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after completing their college degree students need to move
on
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city
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for their higher study.
Secondly
, in
village
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the village
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, not enough job opportunities, and
this
forced
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people
to
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shop
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in
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that ensure earnings.
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, there is not enough public health care in rural areas,
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hospitals, ensure
people
proper
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health
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heath
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, but
unfortunetly
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unfortunately
lact
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last
list
of hospitals forced
people
to live in urban areas. To sum up, lack of educational institution, hospitals and job opportunity
casusing
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causing
people
pressure to move
city
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the city
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from
village
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the village
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.
On the other hand
, a massive number of
people
moving from
contryside
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countryside
causing some problem in
city
life
like traffic congestion,
over population
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overpopulation
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.
For example
, when a huge group of
people
come to a
place
sudden
this
lead those
place
over crowded
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, which means they do not have enough
place
for
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live
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;
as a result
, accommodation problems are increasing day by day.
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,
this
massive number
peoples
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of peoples
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also
affect on
transportation
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sector, huge populations means huge
vehecales
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vehicles
ndeeds
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needs
that means its lead to traffic congestion. To conclude,
city
life
having
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facing difficulties by
people
who are moving from
village
.
To
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conclusion, moving one
place
to another(
village
to
city
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the city
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) for
many
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beneficial
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, but, in the end,
city
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the city
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suffer
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or lose its behaviour.
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